Fuck. Fuck fuck fuck, the style is divine! And the plot... The sex and just, GUH, I don't know what I love more, those careful preparations and foreplay or the thing itself, it's all just so orgasmic, especially words like Coarse stubble: Man. Lips suck on lip: Boy. This totally made me stop and gasp. Unbearably hot, babes, probbaly because phrases are sharp like a knife, and tease the reader's vivid imagination *grins*
Seriously. I've read it twice, and every time, somewhere in the middle, I had to stop and squint because the pictures in my head are so fucking realistic.
I love you. Please write more, you nailed the style!

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